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IMPORTANT !!!!!!
If you want to help me finish this: please go over to Link and help to map the plot lines out. 
When that is done, I will have a much easier time completing this series.
IMPORTANT !!!!!!




You slow down as the two doors slide open in front of you. A wave of hot air and swimming pool chemicals welcomes you into the building.
Even though it's still early in the morning, there are already quite a few customers who are waiting in line to get their ticket for the pool.

Maybe it's because it's new or because the newspapers said so much good about it. It seems like your whole life can change after only a day being here in this pool. It seems crazy but you wanted to check it out anyway, not that there is anything wrong with your life. It's just that it isn't as good as you want it to be.
That, and you like to go for a swim every now and then.

You look around. There is this very fancy and new interior which doesn't really goes to well with the idea of swimming but it's so stylish that there are people who just come here to have a drink.
The drinks are said to be legendary so that's another thing you should try out.
Also, the giant amount of pools there are and the brilliant massage is something you don't want to miss around here.

But for now, there's just a line of people in front of you.
You get bored easily and start looking for some other things.
There are logo's everywhere. Some say 'The Genius Pool' others say just 'TG-Pool'. You look around and try to spot as many as you can.
Fourteen, fifteen, sixteen…
There appear to be a lot on the clothing of the employees.
The weird thing is, they are all men. You don't see a single woman who is wearing the blue uniform and the blue (and admittedly terrible) cap.

A girl is the only one who is still in front of you.
'Can I have one day ticket, please?'
The man at the counter hands her a ticket.
'Is this for the whole place?'
The man nods.
'Even for the massage tables and the spare rooms?'
The man nods again.
The girl turns around and sees that you've been listening to what you said. She blushes.
'It's not that I… I mean, who wouldn't… it's just… you know what? Never mind.'
And she quickly walks away.

You turn to the man behind the counter.
'What's up with her?' You ask him.
'I don't know, some people are just a bit nervous you know.' He replies.
You shrug.
'So, how much does it cost?'
'Full package?' He asks.
You nod.
He points at a board behind him which tell you how much everything costs.

You read:
25 Man
15 Boys
20 Woman
10 Girls
Check my Journal for more information:
[link]

Man: [link]
Boy: [link]
Woman: [link]
Girl: [link]
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:iconsalimalkupar:
Are you going to finish this?
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:iconboneman11:
this is awesome! Thank you for making this

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:icontgf-019:
No problem. I will make it bigger soon.
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:iconsilencecomes:
Are any of the paths complete?
If not, what is the longest one currently? (I'm loving this btw)
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:icontgf-019:
It's ungoing so nothing is completely done yet. I don't know what the longest one is. You find out for yourself ;)
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:icongoodkittynyanchan:
GoodKittyNyanchan Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This idea is quite interesting overall. The options and variety seem limited, but given that this is still a work in progress as of the time I'm writing this, that's understandable.

The biggest issue I've noticed is that there are some transition issues between choices (characters/concepts suddenly popping up without proper intros or being unnecessarily reintroduced).

Overall, I can see this being quite an undertaking, but I certainly would like to see it in its complete form. Looking forward to future additions.
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:icontgf-019:
If you take a closer look, you'll find that the variety is enormous, fiven I'm still working on it. In the end, you can take several hundred, maybe even a thousand different paths that cross each other.
I don't have anyone who is helping me with this and so it's starting out a little slow but I've been working on this for quite a long time and it's becomming bigger and bigger.
There are just several dozens of fillups that need to be done and it's a shitload of work (getting the links right is just a minor part, think about the effort that goes into writing every single story (they all have about the same storyline so it's getting extremely boring)).

Anyway, it would be great if you could indeed point out the errors in the whole thing when you find them. I can't promise that I'll fix them right away but maybe I'll find some time later.
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:icongoodkittynyanchan:
GoodKittyNyanchan Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'll keep an eye out for any big errors (I forgot that I only looked at all the possible branches in only the man ticket).

Once everything is eventually done and polished, I expect this will be quite the adventure. I already wish that I could find this place just so I could jump into the various pools and try various combinations.
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:iconpouijmon:
What's the age for a "man" rather than a boy?
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